In final draft look for empty wording or excessive wording like the examples in Little Seagull, remove these phrases like “there is, there are, it is” to make the writing more clear. Add in the volume and issues of database sources and follow the Little Seagull citation for author in database. Further check in text citations, remove commas after the authors last name before page number, Meagan Grumbling said it was not needed. Change the in-text citation from including all three authors to the (et.al) after the first one. Review more comma splice or run-on sentences and remove them. Add in more ideas from the conference and further develop those claims by dividing more paragraphs. Research more on the idea of accuracy with big data in the medical field or develop claims further with electronic health records and how they add to the big data environment.
