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This pre-writing helped me to manage my thoughts before my initial writing period. I was able to organize how I could set up my essay with what sources I wanted to use. My working these in the middle has been altered from my pre-writing, and the ideas and organization I make within it allowed me to do that. I had specifically stated some points to make in writing and was able to go back and check off each idea once I had included it, another way my pre-writing had kept me on track. Organizing my sources to match up with which point I was making had helped me the most. It allowed me to stay organized with my sources, and if I got confused on which source related to which topic – I was able to look back to this. Overall, the pre-writing had greatly assisted me throughout my essay, allowed me to create a fluid and organized essay as well as tools to fix my working thesis.
While revising my final draft of the big data essay, I primarily focused on developing my claims. I used They Say I Say to develop my “I say” section of my writing. By breaking up one big paragraph into smaller ones with the focus on that one idea, I was able to develop those claims and include more details to support my claims. This allowed me to advance my writing by adding more of my own claims in my writing. Another area of revision I addressed was the sentence-level errors and making my writing clearer. My thesis had been worded in an incorrect way that would have caused confusion for the reader, so while I was changing my thesis I was also focusing on the sentence-level issues. These issues included any run-on sentences or comma splices within my writing that I tend to include without noticing. Other grammatical changes had been made and with the richer development of my claims, my revision process has helped me to advance my writing. I enjoyed having the personal conference with Professor Gennaco to get a better understanding of where she thought I was standing with my essay and the areas that should be improved from what she had noticed. It allowed me to get a better understanding of some improvements I could make rather than what I could have known from a google doc. I did not so much enjoy making our own guidelines for peer review, I feel like all comments were positive and not addressing my issues I had in my writing since we adjusted the guidelines away from my issues with a limited amount of comments. I believe the standard guidelines provided by Professor Gennaco had helped me more in the past with my peer review group, but the conference had helped me the most in this revision process for big data.
